Reflection of Rhetorical Analysis
I feel like I deserve an A- on this paper. I tried really hard to listen to the feedback that I got from you as well as the people in my group. I looked through the Writing and Rhetoric Supplemental Guide to look for things that my paper needed and how it could be improved. I think that my rhetorical tools that I discussed were explained thoroughly and I worked hard to make my introduction better and better especially from the opinion editorial that we wrote. I probably could have gone into a little more detail and focused on how to pertain each thing to my audience, but overall I feel like my final draft improved a lot from my first draft because I tried hard to fix those things.
If I had another chance, I would have gone to the writing center a couple of more times. I really like the feedback that they give there, especially because it is coming from people that know what they are talking about and what is expected from each paper. I would also have tried to go deeper into my analysis within my body paragraphs. I have a hard time really latching on and describing each and every detail. The article that I chose was a little bit harder than I thought to rhetorically analyze. I probably would have chosen a different article to write about.
My biggest challenge was going into a lot of detail when describing my rhetorical tools and explaining what made them effective as well as how they pertained to the audience. I struggled with identifying my audience and pulling them into my essay.
I think that my introduction is very strong. I also think that my ideas are very clear as well as the paragraphs being very organized.
Tuesday, October 16, 2012
Saturday, October 6, 2012
Presidential Debate - Rhetorical Tools
Presidential Debate - Rhetorical Tools:
1: Hand gestures - Both Obama and Romney used their hands when they talked.
2: Eye contact - Romney was very good at using eye contact especially when he was speaking directly to Obama.
3: Confidence - I could tell that Romney was very confident as he was speaking. He seemed to be very comfortable and clear with his arguments.
4: Alliteration - "clean coal"
5: Repetition - "no tax cut that adds to the "deficit" "no tax cut that adds to the deficit"
6: Analogy - Romney talks about his five boys and relates and compares that to his argument.
7: Tone and Voice - I noticed that Romney would raise his voice when he was very passionate about something or when he really wanted to stress that specific argument. This made certain things stand out more so than others.
9: Statistics - Both Romney and Obama used a lot of statistics when giving evidence for their argument.
10: Epistrophe - "spending more, taxing more, regulating more"
1: Hand gestures - Both Obama and Romney used their hands when they talked.
2: Eye contact - Romney was very good at using eye contact especially when he was speaking directly to Obama.
3: Confidence - I could tell that Romney was very confident as he was speaking. He seemed to be very comfortable and clear with his arguments.
4: Alliteration - "clean coal"
5: Repetition - "no tax cut that adds to the "deficit" "no tax cut that adds to the deficit"
6: Analogy - Romney talks about his five boys and relates and compares that to his argument.
7: Tone and Voice - I noticed that Romney would raise his voice when he was very passionate about something or when he really wanted to stress that specific argument. This made certain things stand out more so than others.
9: Statistics - Both Romney and Obama used a lot of statistics when giving evidence for their argument.
10: Epistrophe - "spending more, taxing more, regulating more"
Tuesday, September 25, 2012
Globalization Article
Chapter 5-B - Think Globally, Eat Locally
The author of this article is Jennifer Wilkins and Anna Lappe. Jennifer Wilkins studies the relationship between health and the food system at the College of Human Ecology at Cornell University. Anna Lappe is a national bestselling author and co-founder of the Small Planet Institute as well as the Small Planet Fund. She specializes in a cimate-friendly diet, citizen movements and globalization of factory/farming/intensive animal agriculture. Her motivation for writing this article came from the things she focuses on in her career. I think that the audience is society and the entire population as a whole. Mainly to those who do not have very good dietary habits. The authors are trying to persuade those people to change their habits to help the climate.
The author's initial purpose is to "take the bite out of climate change, and consider some greenhouse gas-lowering dietary guidelines." Jennifer and Anna want the people of this world to help save the climate by changing some of their eating and drinking habits.
One tool that the author's use in this article is analogy. In the section titled "Eat Locally" it says that a year round fresh tomato craving burns the fossil fuel equal to that of driving an 18 wheeler to the moon and back 13 times. Another thing that the author uses to persuade its readers is the use of statistics. In almost every section of this article there is at least one statistic presented based on the situation. For example, in the section titled "Eat Enough, But Not Too Much" it says that according to "nutrition and food system researchers Dorothy Blair of Penn State University and Jeff Sobal of Cornell University estimate that between 1983 and 2000, the amount of food available per person per day in the U.S. increased by 18 percent, or 600 calories." Using statistics helps readers to truly see the impact the subject has on society or in this case climate. The authors diction or word choice is also a tool being used in this article. The words "crisis" and "danger" are used in the beginning to show just how important this subject of climate change is. It attracts the readers and makes them immediately pay more attention because words like that are being used.
Overall I do feel that this article is effective because I think that it gives enough evidence and ideas to support the argument. Not only are there just facts on the situation but it introduces a solution to the problem. The article is specifically telling the audience what they should do. In the end, I was persuaded.
The author of this article is Jennifer Wilkins and Anna Lappe. Jennifer Wilkins studies the relationship between health and the food system at the College of Human Ecology at Cornell University. Anna Lappe is a national bestselling author and co-founder of the Small Planet Institute as well as the Small Planet Fund. She specializes in a cimate-friendly diet, citizen movements and globalization of factory/farming/intensive animal agriculture. Her motivation for writing this article came from the things she focuses on in her career. I think that the audience is society and the entire population as a whole. Mainly to those who do not have very good dietary habits. The authors are trying to persuade those people to change their habits to help the climate.
The author's initial purpose is to "take the bite out of climate change, and consider some greenhouse gas-lowering dietary guidelines." Jennifer and Anna want the people of this world to help save the climate by changing some of their eating and drinking habits.
One tool that the author's use in this article is analogy. In the section titled "Eat Locally" it says that a year round fresh tomato craving burns the fossil fuel equal to that of driving an 18 wheeler to the moon and back 13 times. Another thing that the author uses to persuade its readers is the use of statistics. In almost every section of this article there is at least one statistic presented based on the situation. For example, in the section titled "Eat Enough, But Not Too Much" it says that according to "nutrition and food system researchers Dorothy Blair of Penn State University and Jeff Sobal of Cornell University estimate that between 1983 and 2000, the amount of food available per person per day in the U.S. increased by 18 percent, or 600 calories." Using statistics helps readers to truly see the impact the subject has on society or in this case climate. The authors diction or word choice is also a tool being used in this article. The words "crisis" and "danger" are used in the beginning to show just how important this subject of climate change is. It attracts the readers and makes them immediately pay more attention because words like that are being used.
Overall I do feel that this article is effective because I think that it gives enough evidence and ideas to support the argument. Not only are there just facts on the situation but it introduces a solution to the problem. The article is specifically telling the audience what they should do. In the end, I was persuaded.
Tuesday, September 18, 2012
5 GRAMMATICAL ERRORS
5 GRAMMATICAL ERRORS
1:
1:
- Original sentence: After placing an order for the book she had to wait another two weeks and again make that dreaded trek to the bookstore to pick it up.
- Problem: Run-on. Rule: Use punctuation to break up extremely long sentences when they run on too long.
- Solution: After placing an order for the book, she had to wait another two weeks and again make that dreaded trek to the bookstore to pick it up.
2:
- Original sentence: Less money spent on books would mean more money in our pocket, less time spent on finding, purchasing, and standing in line would mean more time to study.
- Problem: Comma Splice. Rule: Two independent clauses need to be joined together with either a period or a semicolon.
- Solution: Less money spent on books would mean more money in our pocket. Less time spent on finding, purchasing, and standing in line would mean more time to study.
- Original Sentence: The process of having to find, buy order and return books demands an incredible amount of time in a day.
- Problem: Comma. Rule: Always us a comma when breaking up listed items.
- Solution: The process of having to find, buy, order and return books demands an incredible amount of time in a day.
- Original Sentence: Having books online is more convenient, it makes it easier for students to access the material quickly.
- Problem: Colon. Rule: Always put a colon to break up two complete sentences when the second sentence describes the first.
- Solution: Having books online is more convenient: it makes it easier for students to access the material quickly.
- Original Sentence: Less time spent on finding, purchasing and having to stand in line would mean more time to study.
- Problem: Parallel Structure. Rule: Sentence elements that are alike in function should also be alike in construction. These elements should be in the same grammatical form so that they are parallel.
- Solution: Less time spent on finding, purchasing and standing in line would mean more time to study.
Sunday, September 9, 2012
ONLINE BOOKS - PATHOS/ETHOS/LOGOS
ONLINE BOOKS - PATHOS/ETHOS/LOGOS
PATHOS:
1: Save Money: Because of the amount money that is required to purchase books, it can put a lot of students in debt and as a result they are more likely to go into depression and are emotionally unstable.
2: Save Paper: Be a hero!!! Save a tree!!! You can help the world and the economy by not wasting paper on books for classes!!!! Making your audience feel like they are hero's and feel passionate about something would easily persuade them.
3: Save Time: Having online books can help with your stress level because it frees up your time and helps you to be more focused on what needs to be done.
ETHOS:
1: Save Money: As a college student, I personally had to go out and purchase books. I spent over 200 dollars on my books this semester. To go into more detail, only 2 out 5 of my classes actually required books. So that is about 100 per class this semester.
2: Save Time: My roommate has been to the bookstore over 5 times. She went to purchase a book but it was not in stock. She then had to order it and it took over a week to get here. Another time she went and bought a few packets required for her class and waited in line for 45 minutes and then was late to her next class. She has wasted so much time just trying to get all her books for her classes.
3: Save Paper: For one of my classes, I have yet to even use a few of the books that I have had to purchase. I am sure that we will only reference them a few times throughout the semester. That is a lot of paper to be wasted.
LOGOS:
1: Save Paper: Statistics - 1 tree would make approximately 90,000
sheets of paper. That may seem like a lot but when you consider how many pages are used to make a book it is quite small.
1 tree makes about 180 books. How many students across the nation are using that book and how many trees are being taken down. It takes 10 to 20 years for trees to grow
before you can use it to make paper.
2: Save Money: According to the American Student Assistance Program, the average student loan balance is $24,301. According to college board, a typical college student will spend 500 dollars per semester on books. On average, each book can cost 80 to 120 dollars.
3: You are required to purchase books for most classes. If not a book, then it is a packet or some other type of resource information.
Friday, September 7, 2012
Ethos/Pathos/Logos: Pride and Prejudice Mr. Collin's Proposal
Ethos/Pathos/Logos:
After analyzing Mr. Collins Proposal found in the movie Pride and Prejudice, there are many examples of ethos, pathos and logos found within his speech.
Ethos:
1 - The first example of ethos is when Mr. Collins mentions his connection and attachment to the de Bourgh family. By mentioning this, he is trying to establish credibility for himself saying that he has a connection to Elizabeth's family.
2 - Another example is when Mr. Collins says that Lady Catherine de Bourgh told him to find a proper and genuine wife. By saying this, he is declaring credibility for himself and bringing Lady Catherine in as a reason for asking Elizabeth to marry her.
3 - The last example of ethos I found was after Elizabeth first rejects Mr. Collin's proposal. Mr. Collin's says "I am by no means discouraged. Indeed not. I understand that young ladies often reject the addresses of the man they mean to accept, when he first applies for their favor, and therefore I shall hope, my dear cousin, to lead you to the altar before long." He completely read her rejection wrong.
Pathos:
1 - Throughout Mr. Collins proposal, he uses a great deal of compliments to try and persuade Elizabeth to marry him. The first compliment he says is found in the first few sentences of the speech. He said, "your modesty adds to your other perfections." Giving compliments is an example of pathos.
2 - The second example of pathos I found was in Mr. Collins reasons for marrying Elizabeth. He says that by marrying her, it will "add very greatly to my happiness." By saying this, he is trying to appeal to her emotions and make her feel the same way he does.
3 - The final example of pathos is when Mr. Collin's comes out very directly and says "I singled you out as the companion of my future life" This is pathos because it automatically makes Elizabeth feel something inside that kind of shocking at the moment but something that a girl always wants to hear sometime in her life. It catches her attention right away.
Logos:
1 - One example of Logos is found in Mr. Collins reasons for marrying Elizabeth. He says that "every clergyman should set the example of matrimony in his parish." By saying this, he is using his knowledge and logic to give an argument that will persuade Elizabeth's decision.
2 - Another example of Logos found within this speech is when Mr. Collin's mentions that marrying Elizabeth is "best" for him. He is stating a clear fact that in turn will hopefully persuade Elizabeth's decision.
3 - The third example of Logos found in Mr. Collin's proposal is when he says that he will inherit all of Elizabeth's father's estate. And because of this, it is only fair that he choose a wife among his daughters. By saying this, he is again stating a logical argument that pertains to Elizabeth's life.
After analyzing Mr. Collins Proposal found in the movie Pride and Prejudice, there are many examples of ethos, pathos and logos found within his speech.
Ethos:
1 - The first example of ethos is when Mr. Collins mentions his connection and attachment to the de Bourgh family. By mentioning this, he is trying to establish credibility for himself saying that he has a connection to Elizabeth's family.
2 - Another example is when Mr. Collins says that Lady Catherine de Bourgh told him to find a proper and genuine wife. By saying this, he is declaring credibility for himself and bringing Lady Catherine in as a reason for asking Elizabeth to marry her.
3 - The last example of ethos I found was after Elizabeth first rejects Mr. Collin's proposal. Mr. Collin's says "I am by no means discouraged. Indeed not. I understand that young ladies often reject the addresses of the man they mean to accept, when he first applies for their favor, and therefore I shall hope, my dear cousin, to lead you to the altar before long." He completely read her rejection wrong.
Pathos:
1 - Throughout Mr. Collins proposal, he uses a great deal of compliments to try and persuade Elizabeth to marry him. The first compliment he says is found in the first few sentences of the speech. He said, "your modesty adds to your other perfections." Giving compliments is an example of pathos.
2 - The second example of pathos I found was in Mr. Collins reasons for marrying Elizabeth. He says that by marrying her, it will "add very greatly to my happiness." By saying this, he is trying to appeal to her emotions and make her feel the same way he does.
3 - The final example of pathos is when Mr. Collin's comes out very directly and says "I singled you out as the companion of my future life" This is pathos because it automatically makes Elizabeth feel something inside that kind of shocking at the moment but something that a girl always wants to hear sometime in her life. It catches her attention right away.
Logos:
1 - One example of Logos is found in Mr. Collins reasons for marrying Elizabeth. He says that "every clergyman should set the example of matrimony in his parish." By saying this, he is using his knowledge and logic to give an argument that will persuade Elizabeth's decision.
2 - Another example of Logos found within this speech is when Mr. Collin's mentions that marrying Elizabeth is "best" for him. He is stating a clear fact that in turn will hopefully persuade Elizabeth's decision.
3 - The third example of Logos found in Mr. Collin's proposal is when he says that he will inherit all of Elizabeth's father's estate. And because of this, it is only fair that he choose a wife among his daughters. By saying this, he is again stating a logical argument that pertains to Elizabeth's life.
Tuesday, September 4, 2012
Opinion Editorial Proposal
The topic I have chosen for my opinion editorial is the books for BYU college students. I think that the administration should work to cut down the excessive fees for textbooks in order to help alleviate the costs associated with attending college. This topic is extremely relevant to all of the BYU college students enrolled at this university because we are all required to purchase at least one book for every class we sign up for.
Not only is the tuition for just school here at B.Y.U. so expensive, but adding on the costs of books makes it almost impossible for some students to go here. Often times professors will only reference a book that you payed 200 dollars for, 2 or 3 times during a semester. Is buying that book really necessary in that situation? Are there any other options?
When thinking about a solution to this problem, I think that the administration should roll the fees for textbooks in with tuition without having to raise tuition. I know that to some people this may seem unfair because it is as if we are getting free books, but if you are required to have a certain book for a certain class, why not just make it come with the class instead of having it has a separate purchase.
Another solution would be to have the books online. For a minimal fee, students would have access to any book they needed online. This would save paper, save time to pick up books and take them back. It would also help when books go out of date. An online book would be east to update and as a result you would not have to go buy new ones every time one little thing changes.
With this issue, I am going to have to assume that my audience is a group of poor B.Y.U students that are in desperate need of money and a good education.
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